Don't have much time to give the comment you deserve, but I wanted to be the first to tell you how dellllicious and heart-warming this poem is.
I'm so in love. I could almost smell all those scents and see all those colours. Watching your father cook for you, capturing all his moves, listening to him sing... that was so tender. Reminded me of all our late family dinners and how we'd hurry to get everything ready because we'd be sooo hungry.
I love the "ginger grated to gold" and "onions sliced into crescents" images.
I love how you pay attention to the tiniest of details. Felt like I was watching a scene in slow motion.
I love everything about this poem.
I agree with Noura and if I hadn't broken my diet -.- ( I feel like a fool too for not having better restraint) I'd probably would have gone to the kitchen and raided my fridge and started cooking this poem is so sweet and made me smile especially since me and my mom are the only ones that cook (mom is so much better I just cook basic stuff lol) never my dad but this poem is truly special 5/5 go Abby :)
This is such a heart warming write that it brought
a picture of my father in the kitchen. In that one
paragraph the writer has drawn the looks of the
character, his mood, the work he is doing; along
with the atmosphere, aroma and the things that
he is using. Each line has got vivid images for
the reader to see rather then to imagine. I also like
the way this poem ended. It has a soft touch to it. Nicely written.
This piece was completely refreshing to read! The aromas created, the care in your father's actions, everything you have painted comes alive in each line. I like the allure of it and the excitement you have in watching him, like a little child caught in a moment of wonder and awe. I know you wrote this in one sentence for a reason as you replied in the comments, and I think it fits so well as I read it in a almost rushed way, fully intrigued as this atmosphere was being imagined. What I admire about this piece is that you show the reader your father, these are all his actions (cooking, singing) and you show the food he makes and everything involved, and I am inspired by this man. Not because you said "he" all the time or described exactly how he felt, but this whole piece holds such a charismatic attitude. I can feel his happiness seep through this piece. Wonderful gem, this poem is oozing with personality! (4)
One of the many reasons why Abby's poetry stands out on this site is her ability to give the reader a 100% visual's, a picture in words.
What an amazing poem this is.
In every detailed line, I see her father in full description, cooking and humming along to a song that only he knows, cooking the way he cooks and just being his wonderful self. The author expresses her love for her father from start to finish in the descriptive masterpiece.. Just outstanding!!
The fun and flavorful words she uses is another bonus to this poem, such as "pulpy and crinkled"- You can hear him cutting on the chopping board and smell the food cooking... simply Beautiful!