Comments : Just run

  • 9 years ago

    by NoHopeLeft

    Love this it remind me of running away as a child that secluded feelings whilst surrounded by trees. Then ud trip and fall and get muddy... Them special days ate blissful. 5/5

    • 9 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Those days where special. Indeed.

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I adore Etherees and this was such an enthralling piece! It makes me long for spring now and want to break out in a sprint to the forest across the street from my house (I'd be crazy if I did that now in the snow though haha)

    You wrapped this poem up with so much to ponder. I actually thought it would just be about the thrill of running, or the chance to reflect when running and connecting with nature, yet I feel there is a stronger pull to human nature. That our human nature may be to continue life (throw the clothes in the laundry, get dressed, go to work) yet we are not taking time for ourselves to let off energy and heal. Alone time can be healthy. I also liked how you mentioned that the more times the clothes are washed, the more chances that the colors will fade. It makes me think if our spirit will fade, if we continue or mechanical life, not do anything spontaneous or adventurous?

    It's certainly refreshing to start the day anew, or wash up (more often needed!) after a run or time outside, but your whole tie-in with the past mistakes was neat. Like there is almost a sacredness in realizing we are human, have our mistakes, and instead of obliterating their traces, sometimes we have to remember we made them to understand the place we are today.

    Contemplative write! Very much enjoyed.

    • 9 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Mary Anne, lol. It's hard to run in the snow.

    • 9 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Mary Anne, lol. It's hard to run in the snow.

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Just breathe..

    Just breathe :p

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Nicely done with the Etherees! I like this form and you have chosen words wisely to achieve the triangle shape. I also like how you introduce the next verse with "But do not forget"; it makes the reader to stop and kinda relax too!

    I like the freshness of the second verse. Its almost like breathing in mother nature and sighing. Sounds like a morning peaceful wake to the day. Well done!

  • 9 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Hilarious and enchanting. That's how I feel about your poetry: Just write, every day!

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    Interesting arrangement of this exciting format, I like duplicating it as well, it forms many beautiful shapes.

    But I have been thinking about the category itself, I think it belongs to life more than nature, it's the meaning grasped by the end of the poem...

    The repetition of the some of the words must be intentional to create internal rhythm, right? it created very balanced tone.
    ~breathe deeply,
    Just deeply breathe,
    ^The palindrome as well worked very well to emphasize the thoughts.

    I enjoyed reading this, writing differently is always challenging. Thank you for sharing.