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by Brookie   Feb 23, 2015


Love,

I understand you've
Been confused by
The illusions I've let loose

But the bottom line is
keep it
to yourself

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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I like where you took this one as well and how you managed to keep it to a short poem, with a simple message portrayed!

    I think this poem is quite personal for you, and how you know people will have their views and opinions of you and your choices, but that you are telling them to listen to you as you tell them to keep their opinions to themselves. I think beneath the lines there is a sense that these people do not matter, and although it may be hurtful that they choose to have these opinions, you know it will not get the better of you.

    It says a lot for a small poem, which makes it work.

    I think you done well to title the poem with a short title, and it is almost as if you are now aiming this poem at every reader who opens your poem. It speaks volumes of judgement and how people have no right to judge others, so keep unwanted thoughts and opinions to yourself.

    Great effort, well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This poem stands out on its own merit, I love how love stands out on its own, because you are speaking to a certain person a person you are or were close with, a friend or a former lover maybe. also you do make the reader curious to see where you are going with this piece. The second line is almost apologetic, like you are saying sorry for something that you don't have to at all. what are these illusions are there here? Then the last line hits you and the person you are writing about in the face. such a great twist in the ending. Now you are saying to this person "shut up, I have listened to your hurtful words for long enough". I love this for each stanza tells a story in such few words. well done!

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Powerful! I chose "Keep it to yourself" as my prompt too, and in these few lines, it illustrates that tension with your love. How you're pleading for them to listen. Whatever these illusions may be, they need to think again or stay silent before acting on impulse or what they "perceive".