Oh my mercy mother of all trees.....

OMG!!! Nana, this might be the best poem you wrote to this date O_O

I. Am. Speechless!!!! And am in love with it!

This is a poem which can be called as a wonderful.. Amazing and superb. Great job Rania Moallem:)

Nice one... 5/5

Wow! Loved it so much!!

Hello Nana. :)

Honestly, I have no idea where people come up with these wonderful metaphors and beautiful pieces of imagery. I hope that someday in my life, I can be as creative as that. I doubt that I ever will be though. This poem deserved the win, and I mean deserved it.

I love this piece, as I say in almost every piece that I comment on. I do love poetry, and people on here write wonderful pieces. You are also one of them, and this one is no exception. I know that this was written for a challenge on the main boards, but what really makes me wonder is how did you manage to come up with something like this in so short a time? It probably would have taken me years in order to come up with something like this, at least weeks.

Have I embraced all
the flaws that perfectly
shape my human-class,
that now I feel whole?

^ After reading this, I think that this stanza is your strongest stanza, not only because it is the beginning, but because the topic is such a strong one. I am glad that you have been able to accept your flaws, Nana. That does make you a secret millionaire, for after accepting yours you can accept everyone else's flaws. This makes it so that you are able to live life with a kind and gentle soul, which is what the world has always needed. I wish that I was able to accept mine wholeheartedly.

Beautiful

~S

The thing that strikes me the most about this poem is that very strong contrasts. You have one extreme to the other, which adds to the "drama" of the poem, and I really like that. Adds a bit of extra flair.

Your images are strong, clear and concise, yet also this very crazy twist of metaphors. I feel confused in a fun way when reading this -- there is just SO MUCH going on and happening. It's really a twist!

I love how you ended it with embracing your flaws. I really love the hopeful hint in the tone! Congrats on your win!

This has the essence of what human nature is about and how has individual we view and interpret. I like the imagery that comes out with each verse as well as the uninterrupted flow...nicely penned. Congrats on the win!

Nana, this is sublime, my friend!

Have I embraced all
the flaws that perfectly
shape my human-class,
that now I feel whole?

^ This is such a beautiful start to the poem. we all have flaws and some of them are used against us a lot of times sadly. we have to learn to love ourselves first and then we can become who we want to be. You are whole and that is a great first step, but can you learn to live with those flaws?

Dead stars shining bright
in the axis of my eyes,
cracks deepening in
this heart of floods and droughts,
a fire core blazing in my soul-
sunshine rays combed
within my hair,
hurricanes in my mind,
roots branching their
way into the deep
layers of life and soil
in this globe of death and tombs.

^ wow this holds such powerful imagery within. The use of nature to describe how you feel here is great. it works well, because you used each disaster as a different emotion and that in itself is rare.

Showered with blizzards
of lightning and thunder
that awaken the lion
of spring running wild
in my arteries and veins;
roaring off the smoke
of clouds I often wear as a crown,
for the king of endurance
owns a kingdom in my blood.

^ This is here the story turns and often we feel a shift when the weather clear and this is a perfect example. you felt the cold inside of you for the longest time, and now you realize that it doesn't last forever. while we might have been weak, you are coming back strong like a lion, and that is a great metaphor.

Patterns of diverse moons
and planets clinging to my eyelashes,
stirring beneath my ears,
widening my vision to ponder upon
and listen passionately -
to the harmony in this
aligned chaos of mine;
for I've embraced my flaws
that perfectly shape my
origin as a human;
an identical twin to
this imperfect but priceless universe;

such a secret millionaire.

^ Beautiful ending here hon. It is interesting to see the poem through your eyes, but there is so much truth ion this because when people are sad they don't realize how beautiful the world is, they only stew on the darkness, but here you did a great job in showing that darkness but also showed what it can be like when you find that light, great poem 5/5

Deep and meaningful poem which truly expresses the experience of life, what it holds and what it gives out, good and bad, and how to embrace it all, turning flaws and imperfections into something to cherish and appreciate. Touching story with a great title to go with it.

This is a thoroughly excellent piece. Well written indeed.