Comments : I'll always be that shadow

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Third stanza: "brighten" should be "brightened"?

    Second to last stanza: "I Always be there,"..."I" should be "I'll"?

    My, my, my. I can't even form the words it takes to describe how this affects me. And how much my heart goes out to you. Luce, your poems always speak to me from the depth of them and the way you can connect and take time to ponder what's going on, what thoughts, feelings, etc.

    To me, this poem gives me the vision of you as a selfless, yet vulnerable, person who loves and cares for another. And who ultimately, as you wrote, doesn't need to be praised for that guidance, for that light, as you will still be present even if unnoticed or unappreciated. I liked the idea of wondering what let this person see you - that made me think of the quote "things happen for a reason" and certain forces, whether it be spiritual or not, can move us toward something we thought couldn't happen. This person may have been affected and influenced by you, even though you were simple as a shadow.

    This was such a genuine piece though, that even if you can't do anything in the moment, speak to this person or move them forward, you'll be that witness to their joys and sorrows, and you'll somehow get them through it.

    A comforting poem, glad you shared this.

  • 9 years ago

    by Chamomile

    This poem is a pure reflection of who you are Lice!!

    "I only know
    that I'll always be that shadow,
    unseen or seen, who won't care
    If it's seen or unseen,
    But who'll always be there
    underneath your feet,
    Behind your back,
    And to each of your sides,"
    ^
    I looooove this, whether your seen or not it doesn't matter as long as your existence is acknowledged (Always being there). This itself is enough for anyone to know that you are a caring person.

    I'm sure this will touch any friend/family of yours, because it is genuine :) Love it!!

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    No no no chamomile....this poem is not and should not be reflection of who she is...
    She is not a shadow that stays on the ground...who goes unseen or seen...

    She is rather the pole star in the sky who is always noticed, distinct...and people look at her with admiration and look for her when they need to be guided....
    At least she is my pole star... :)

    Okay i'm horribly bored studying and a little distraction will get me study again so i'm commenting....don't hate me if the comment is practically useless like most of the time :p

    I came to be the shadow behind your back,
    the shadow underneath your feet,
    And the shadow to each of your sides
    ^^^
    I love how you describe the shadow...it kinda says how the shadow changes from morning to night...it changes but still stays constantly at your feet.
    In the morning and afternoon it stays behind you, depending in the direction in which you walk....it stays beneath you at 12 and to all your sides kinda gave me the impression that this person is standing in a playground at night....when there are lights switched on in all directions and there are four shadows...if you ever watched any sports channel you must have noticed this....

    Though I'm unsure who was the lamp
    that illuminated your thoughts,
    So you could see me where I was,

    I'm unsure who was that sun,
    that brighten your days,
    and helped you see, where I was,

    ^^^
    brighten will be brightened....
    I always love how you are so thankful to other people and appreciate all their efforts...your poems reflect that quality if yours, being thankful....and I must say, it is an awesome feeling to thank others...more awesome than being thanked...and I have also noticed that you always say that there is an intermediary between you and this special person....i noticed it in some previous poem of yours that I read....there is an intermediary and you don't know who it is and you always thank them....oh yes, that poem with the shoes and laces and socks thing...:p

    I'm really unsure as to whom was that light,
    that made me be visible to your eyes
    ^^^
    Really unsure huh??? :p why it is me darling, who made you visible to this person...i am that light...:p
    Whom will be who..in my opinion...

    I only know
    that I'll always be that shadow,
    unseen or seen, who won't care
    If it's seen or unseen,
    But who'll always be there
    underneath your feet,
    Behind your back,
    And to each of your sides,
    ^^^
    You really are relentless aren't you...isn't it so nice that you suddenly went from really unsure...to I know ill always... I've always liked the concept of shadows...always wanted to write some good poem but well I never could come up with anything great.
    This speed how unselfish you are, another virtue of yours.. :) you always give no mater whether you receive out back or not.and are always there, I can agree to that whole heartedly. :p ummm...i'm sensing I just said something wrong...

    Always watching you wherenever I can
    Even if I can't be of help
    I Always be there, 
    To keep you company,
    To make sure that you are okay
    ^^^
    The first line is whenever..typo.???..
    Yet another virtue...your caring nature...goodness, I can decipher the entire you in your poem...okay I suddenly agree with chamomile...this poem is just a reflection of you.... But darling, you are the pole star not the shadow and I wouldn't really like the person who makes you feel like a shadow.. :(

    But darling
    I'll always be there,
    Until I die,
    Then I'll be watching you
    From above.
    ^^^
    And here we are, above....you are the pole star...you are the beauty that should dwell in the sky up above....so everyone LOOKS UP to you...aspires to be as full of qualities like you...and look at you with admiration...who is always noticed even if there are a 1000000000000000000000000000000000000 to the time infinity stars in the sky...you always stand distinct....
    ^_^
    And then someone like me can proudly exclaim, she is my pole star...my guide and the one I aspire to be like
       

    You are awesome too sweet luso...
    Gosh...you are a blessing to me sweet Lucy ...:)

    • 9 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Purvi, but im really just like a shadow in this person's life. I'm also not a pole star hmm I'm just me, a human being full of flaws. But happy about it. :)

      Thank you I appreciate your comment.

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Then I don't like this person who treats you like this :(

    Goodness what sort of an idiot is this person to not realize the star he or she has ....??? :/ :(

    And maybe not to others but to me you are my Poole star...my guide the one who shows me the right direction :)

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Then I don't like this person who treats you like this :(

    Goodness what sort of an idiot is this person to not realize the star he or she has ....??? :/ :(

    And maybe not to others but to me you are my Poole star...my guide the one who shows me the right direction :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    Wow! I really adore this piece, Ms Lucero .. That is exactly what I am feeling right now, too .. I will always be a shadow for someone .. Haha ..

    --- MKKK