Comments : Baby's first cry (Katauta)

  • 5 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Nicely Penned GB!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like how you have linked a baby's cry to a warrior. I know there are some rituals where boys who become warriors have a ceremony where their cries show or announces their statehood. Nicely penned.

  • 5 years ago

    by =The-Fairy-Mary-Poppins=

    This poem hurts me so bad *wipes the tears out of my eyes* as a mother (spiritually speaking) it breaks my heart because I always wanted a little daughter when I was younger I wanted a baby girl and throughout my life I had multiple time where I could've had a daughter and this hits a little bit to close to home, since my daughter would've a warrior, a fighter, a lover, but mostly she would've been beautiful inside and out. Nicely done sweetie I hope one day you have your little warrior to protect and to love. 5/5

    - Moria Bella Bair -

    • 5 years ago

      by GB

      Oh, my dear, thank you very very much :)

      It's becoming everything I'm dreaming of.

  • 4 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Dear Samia,

    The process of being born is the ultimate battle to the baby and you captured that so well in your poem. So many die in the process of exiting the womb, for so many different reasons. They are indeed brave little soldiers:)
    My boy almost died as well, he came out of the womb all blue and with an Apgar score of 1. You would not tell, though, if you looked at him now!
    I hope you will have a child as well, as I just know it would have the best mum ever:)

    Take care, dear lady,

    much love xx Ingrid

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a clever little piece. Well written.

  • 4 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Love this write :) i am very fond of this forn too ive played with it myself but i like this better lol

  • 4 years ago

    by Em

    This is beautiful and brought a tear to my eye. You captured so much is so few lines, well done.


  • 4 years ago

    by [M(/)U]

    Really nice! Great job!