WHEN THE MIND HALTS

Another old comment for you ;)

"This poem seems like a more abstract one, with phrases such as "travel backwards on the wings of a songless bird", "hope of resurgence", "an ember of memory" or "a whispered curse". I think these are the less effective part of the poem as they seem a bit too vague, though they do manage to set the right dreamy mood. Good thing is that concrete images are pulled in to balance the abstractness again, which resulted in a nice mix of "showing and telling" in poetry. It's a snap-back to reality kinda feel which I think was effectively composed. I like the intense focus on the glass, on a table, in a room, which truly brings forth the whole idea of the poem: when the mind halts. Last but not least, I loved the clever choice of verbs in the last stanza, "parched" being well-suited to be reminded of the origami crane in the beginning again. Well-crafted piece of work!"

I absolutely love the imagery, beautiful.