Written in the stars: (Syntuit/ Haiku/ Senyru/ Sijo)

by Mr. Darcy   May 15, 2016


The power of nature,

Harmony is sought
in the chaotic cosmos:
can love merge the stars?

When beauty replaces itself

Skylarks sing sweetly
high above rich spring mudflats;
soon the sea will come...

sharing more than love...

Coffee, paints and pens
spread out on a picnic blanket:
creativity

Made with stardust

Lovers made a wish: Just one day to make their dreams come true.
Surely impossible, their chaos required a small miracle?
Harmonious connection occurs when stars align.

michael
2016

Note - the Sijo form is a first attempt, but I hope it inspires others to try this ancient form.

See this link for how to write one yourself:
http://www.writersdigest.com/whats-new/sijo-poetic-form

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  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, this is just beautiful! Very creative as always-I feel like such a hack when I read your stuff-lol. Take care-Brenda

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Michael as always an excellent piece by you. 3 short forms in one and one i haven't heard of before so thanks for that.

    So much beautiful imagery.

    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I am going to set some time aside later and have a look at that link - it strikes me as an interesting form. Thanks for pointing me in that direction,

    Speak soon.

    ps I think it reads really well now, by the way. It truly is an excellent work.

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Ben, you make me laugh. ..

    It is true that your syntuit to the power of trois sewed a little seed. When Claire and I managed to carve some time together yesterday I took my note book. First the haiku, then the Senyru, then the rest followed at home.
    I stumbled across the sijo form, but to be honest it's more complex that my poor attempt displays. I strongly recommend you reading the link.

    Thanks for your support aand advise. I have adjusted the format accordingly.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Michael

    So, I was rather smug after posting the first chain syntuit in history (from Larry himself) but I see you feel the need to follow after me, sweeping the gold dust I left in my wake by posting every single form in the book and a made up one at the end. I tell you, good fellow, I am sick of it! :)
    This is wonderful and brilliantly creative. In all honesty, I wasn't sure about the titles throughout the poem when I first read it as they seemed to distract me from what I was reading. But like all good senryu/haiku/syntuit (and that other supposed form!) the title is entirely relevant. Perhaps I would suggest removing the bracketed forms after each title as that would lend the piece more fluency. You wouldn't lose anything because you have already stated the forms in their proper order in the title. Not sure, but to be honest, it works well either way, simply because of how good the piece is.

    This may just be good enough to earn my nomination today....I will see how I feel, lol

    Take care and all the best, Michael
    Ben

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