Comments : Your Life

  • 6 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    A short yet powerful piece I think that states sometimes we're never good enough for someone but the fact is they're just not worth it

    • 6 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Hi Em thanks for your comment - I’m scared you might be right x

  • 6 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    I'm afraid you won't. 10 years ago, this was me. I feel your hurt & your frustration. Very well written. Take care.
    Catherine x

    • 6 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Hi Catherine thanks so much for your comment - it means a lot to me as it’s my first one on my first submission. Bad situation has at least woken up my creativity.
      Take Care x

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    An honest raw write that I thank you for sharing. Em's right, it's not you, it's them, They don't deserve you. Hang in there and welcome to P&Q!

    • 6 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Thanks Brenda for taking the time to read and comment. Hanging on is definitely what I’m doing! ;-) x

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Hi Natasha and welcome to p&q :-)
    This piece made me wince a bit ... it's a sad situation. It's not that YOU'RE not enough though, it's that you're far too good to not be someone's priority. You should be the one and only and relationships that start this way rarely last because of exactly how they started ... how could you ever find trust?
    I'm looking forward to reading more from you :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 6 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Hi Kitty and thank you so much for your feedback. I take on board all your comments - posting on here has been enlightening! So lovely to have supportive comments from people I don’t know. Thank you xx

  • 6 years ago

    by Jamie

    The simplicity of this poem makes it more powerful in my opinion. The title speaks volumes to me because it tells me that this poem will be about someone elses life. If we go by just the title you leave who it could be up to the reader's imagination which is something i really like in a poem's title.

    Stanza one- This screams sadness or even depression to me and i feel like you have been going through this for a long time. This stanza also tells the reader that this is probably about either a boyfriend or a husband who has continued to hurt you over and over. And i feel like there is a lot of anger because you are fed up with that hurt.

    Ending- I enjoyed this ending a lot because for one it continues with the mixture of anger and sadness. And two it seems to confirm that you were or are married to this person. I love poems whether they be short or long that continue the story within all of their stanzas. And you have done well here. :)

    • 6 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Hi Jamie and thanks for such a detailed post about my poem. I love being able to share my innermost feelings and get an objective response to my poetry. Take care x

  • 6 years ago

    by Lost One

    This is short, but speaks volumes. All the best
    -Tony

  • 5 years ago

    by Matt Carroll

    Powerful expression in few words. Well done.

    • 5 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Thank Matt, appreciate your comments x

  • 5 years ago

    by Khai Montegrande

    Straight from the heart Phoenix! Very few words with broad meaning

    • 5 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      It was - raw and painful but true. Thanks for the comment Karen x

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Crikey, this one hits hard! Well written, but I am sorry if the content is literal.

    Do take care and all the best,

    Ben

    • 5 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥


      Thanks for the kind comment Ben and yes sadly it is literal x

  • 5 years ago

    by Brise

    I can't believe I missed reading this poem Phoenix, very strong and heartfelt piece. I can say I was once in this same situation, I hope you've moved past it and you aren't hurting anymore. Wish you all the best!!

    • 5 years ago

      by Phoenix ¥

      Thanks Brise x Things have moved on but the sentiment remains..