Decayed By Your Touch.

by Blank   Apr 30, 2018


This poem was made very recently, I had to write down what I was feeling, it is quick and very improvised, and would love feedback/ideas on improvement, enjoy!
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My heart, so pure, so sweet.
The innocence of a flower, so bright and so neat.

I opened it for you,
I gave you my key.
You opened my chest,
Your light and the warmth cradled my heart.

Little did I know, your touch was poison.
Mouldy and rotten.
A liar, a cheat.

Your delicate hand, grazed my heart, pouring into you, my blood and soul, absorbed by your charm. Stuck in your grasp.

Played me like a game,
And plagued me the same.
For now it's broken and black.
Dead and Decayed.

By your touch.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Imagine a lump of clay.
    Got it?
    Now, in one minute I want you to create a head and neck.
    Got it?
    Now, rework the head, adding the eyes, nose and mouth. Take your time.
    Got it?

    Where am I going, you ask?

    Well, reworking poems can make them come alive. Sometime removing unecessary words/ lines can improve the overall piece.
    Less really can be more.

    Show me the pain.

  • 6 years ago

    by Brise

    I was about to say the same, I love that last stanza, so full of imagery, I felt your hurt, understand your naivete, well done!

    • 6 years ago

      by Blank

      Thank you alot <3

  • 6 years ago

    by Scrittore

    Wow, very well written, especially for so quickly done. I love the last stanza!

    • 6 years ago

      by Blank

      Thank you very much! <3

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