Comments : A day to remember…

  • 3 years ago

    by Michael

    Mr D,
    A witty piece, with nice touches of rhyme and a lesson learned!
    Well done my friend, enjoyed this :)

  • 3 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I so so get this.

    I loved the nature and frivolous part, but it has also a very very strong message.

    Before I joined use army I worked for British rail. I started off as a shunter (the guy on the tracks linking the carriages and traction engines together). I then worked as a guard for about a year.

    In both roles the horror stories filtered back. Always by misadventure. I know a guy who lost his leg and two friends (all three were employed in the service).

    Railway tracks are for one thing only. Trains!

    Fantastic poem with a crucial message.


  • 3 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    It was a pleasure reading and so glad to see it nominated. All the very best

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Two lessons, surely. The other being, keep your clothes on in public...

    • 3 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      To be honest, there was not a lot floating around in my department. Lol
      Next time a wet suit and only in a designated zone! ;0)

  • 3 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Mr D this is a fantastic and dare I say it humorous piece which has a great impacted ending which states "don't mess on the tracks" because as Craig stated they're for one thing only and that's trains.... My 'dad' works on the railways and has had 2 fatalities due to people playing chicken, it's just not worth it.

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    With an innocent scene of two young birds comes a
    horror one can never imagined...I started to read fast just to know what
    happened?! Liked the flow of the poem smooth and entertaining!

  • 3 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    How can you be funny and warning of such perils at the same time? It's excellent and made me giggle and gasp in equal measures :-) x