Comments : Abyss

  • 5 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    I really like to read small poems that are packed with an overload of emotion.

    Your word usage is placed just right and it allows the visual display to come full force from start to finish!

    and I just want to add I really love this poem :-) I'm nominating this poem, just wow!!

  • 5 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    This poem really does take the reader into the abyss. Superb. Milly x

  • 5 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Firstly, I like this poem, especially for the word 'uproarious' that is really a good word. :O)
    We often beat ourselves up, saying we did this to ourselves. Sometimes this is true, but often there are a few reasons for fate. Still, after the palpitations have ebbed, I think you'll find forgiveness.

    I just wanted to suggest an acrostic. You have 'say wast' at the moment, by adding an 'e' line you would have 'say waste' this would, I think, ties in nicely with your theme.
    Just a thought.

    Take care

    • 5 months ago

      by Guilty By Design

      Thanks for the tip. If I go back and tweak it I’ll keep that in mind

  • 5 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    I agree with Mr. Darcy, uproarious is definitely a $20 USD word. You packed so much into your short poem, it is not always that our conscience is the one that accuses us, Satan is a master at it!
    I agree, that sometimes, it can be the hardest thing to forgive one's self.
    Added to my Favorites.

    • 5 months ago

      by Guilty By Design

      Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I think some people under estimate how powerful the mind is.

  • 5 months ago

    by CRAFTY KEN

    Congrats on the HM