How is that you describe what is often indescribable? These moments where it's like our bones ache and we can't quite find that peace, that perfected moment of repose, and we just wait.... wait for an action or for time to pass or to feel something different.
Reading this again, I'm reminded of when we "dissociate" and see the world moving and changing around us, seeing the sun in its positions, and we can't pinpoint what we need or how we need to be heard during this "pause."
So thoughtful and lovely in its reminiscence of those little breaks in the day.
i can relate to a certain degree. This is so magnificently portrayed. Keep it up!
3 years ago
by Ben Pickard
I love this, Rania. My only suggestion would be a single dash instead of a comma after 'I paused for a moment' in line two as a comma doesn't serve up the length of pause I believe you are after. eg, 'I paused for a moment - longer than a moment'.
Anyway, just a suggestion. Well done.