Comments : I Love Spring So

  • 4 months ago

    by Everlasting


  • 4 months ago

    by BOB GALLO

    I do not know when this audience of fair judgment is going to acknowledge how great, you also, are in sonnets and form poetry. Why can't they see that??
    Another statistic: You are here since 2013. Where is your deserved pages of glory in front page??

    • 4 months ago

      by Mark

      Praise from a poet such as yourself and Everlasting, is a win for me.

  • 4 months ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Very sweet. Still, love you so. You have made a twist to the style you have carried along with the poem.

    I'm glad someone else nominated this piece. I also liked the link between your title and the last words.

    Very lovely Mark

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is truly lovely, Mark.
    I am actually going to try to answer Bob's question honestly, and I hope you take it as it's meant.
    Your sonnets are regularly on the brink of perfection. They are full of genuinely outstanding imagery and are rhymed well throughout with a turn of phrase that is entirely suited to the form. However, I also believe that sometimes your sonnets can become almost too bogged down with imagery and language and their meanings can become more opaque. Perhaps this puts some judges off sometimes, I'm not sure. They need reading and re-reading to get clarity (which is no bad thing at all) but perhaps sometimes judges feel they don't have the time available.
    I would also say that your iambic pentameter is not always quite there. For instance, line 6 here is completely thrown (in my view) by the words 'violet'. I believe it has three syllables, but because we say it as two - almost like 'vi-let' - the meter is thrown. Sometimes, the iambic meter can be correct, but it isn't 'good' iambic meter if that makes sense.
    On a side-note, in this poem particularly, I cannot hear a rhyme of any kind between 'of' and 'love' - perhaps not even a half rhyme. Again, though, this is just to my ear and regional dialects change so much that rhyme in one place is not the same in another; in fact, I believe you had the same issue with one of my sonnets recently.
    I say again, though, to make it absolutely clear: your ability to turn out remarkable sonnets so frequently is a talent itself, and your use of imagery is outstanding. But sometimes I feel your sonnets could do with 'sharpening up' a little to keep on-point and allow more transparency. However, you're in your 30s - keep writing like this and they really will be perfect very soon, I would imagine.

    Excellent work, Mark, and I agree - this should be on the front page.


  • 4 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Mark, your sonnets are always beautiful and inspiring. To be honest, I thought yours would make the front page.
    As for this one, it's another fine example of flowing poetry. In my opinion, nature poems should paint ballet and yours delivers.