Your writing works well together! Due to vocabulary choice, there are moments I can put my finger on who wrote it but that is not a problem at all! It’s certainly a romantic poem, one that flows effortlessly from image to image. I particularly enjoyed the third and fifth stanza as even though this poem is heavy with ‘starry’ imagery, it’s best when it sounds vulnerable and honest.
‘the opulent warmth in your heart
is more valuable than any metal
is a little overworded. Opulent stands out as a little verbose? I’ve no problem wiry verbosity but here, it’s too...loud? A mouthful. Stands out too much. I also appreciate the change in lyrical matter to these small refrains but I found this part too disquieting.