Unknown lover

by Vanesa   Apr 3, 2020


A sharp light pierces through the window
Casting little rays of light over your
tender
pale
body
The rain throws its soothing melancholy song against the window
You
are
so
astonishing in this light

I try not to wake you
I lay my head on you
Passionate
loyal
and trusting beats pound through your chest
I let my fingers dance around your soft skin
Bumps
cuts
scratches and scrapes.
Each one with their own little story
I know the tales to some
Pain
Ache
Regret
Tristeza.
But I’ve yet to know the sorrow of them all
Still,
I trace each scar as if it were a
‘stay in the lines coloring assignment.’

Not sure how to finish this. 3 52 4 3

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  • 4 years ago

    by Kate

    I actually quite like the way you have some words stand alone. When I read it, I pause for a little longer and it emphasizes the point you’re trying to make, that this person beautiful, enticing. I like that you mimic that in the second half but with negative things. It contrasts so well.

    As for the ending, I’m not sure what you could do with it. You could leave it as you not know what all of the scars are for or if the poem is supposed to praise the person or show them in a beautiful light you could return to that theme, like the beginning.

  • 4 years ago

    by prasanna

    I really love the whimsy nature of this poem, it's really cute. Well done! Out of curiosity, what do the numbers ( 3 52 4 3) mean?

    • 4 years ago

      by Vanesa

      It was three twenty five in the morning on April third
      Just some form of keeping track of when I write things

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