Comments : First Date

  • 3 months ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Even without the note at the end, I was trying to find words to describe the "song like melody". I think it flowed just fine. And it felt easy, not rushed or forced, the way you talked about the first date and (first?) love. Something with such innocence, yet such energy, I couldn't help but feel carefree reading this. Then the heaviness of the last few lines, and kind of the bluntness of realizing beautiful things come to an end. I kind of had an experience like that. And I tried to prolong it, but it wasn't meant to be. There's that bitterness in maybe never knowing if the two of you were meant to be, or if this was just fate. Something so enlivening, then fades away...

    Love reading your work, Kate!

    • 3 months ago

      by Kate

      Thank you! I wish it were based on true events but it’s not. The feeling behind it, absolutely. Losing someone you love when you thought you’d have forever, or at least longer than you did, is something I’ve dealt with especially in the last two years or so. Glad you liked it!

  • 2 months ago

    by Walter

    I love the flow and the feel to this Kate. A superb write and added to my favourites!

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Milton

    I really enjoyed this one! I know you know what I'm talking about. lol. but basically it was kind of like this. The first day was like the best day ever. I went from doing nothing one day to just feeling lost in happiness and freedom the next. All I can do is wonder if she remembers. Great job on this! =)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Areeba

    It was cute and reminded me of my first love. Beautifully written