Some of your lines are magical, some of them over do the others, it's like your words are competing to describe this character in the finest way possible. How elegant and how deep. The vividness is always a spot on.

A very inspiring piece.

You need to remove "be" before become I think.

This is just gorgeous. Beautifully lyrical the lines flow effortlessly along and it carries such a wonderful depth of meaning. I love it.