Comments : The Treachery of Time

  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    That last line! This was different from your other writes, and it especially hit me, with how relatable it is, and how gut-wrenching it can be, when time surprises us in this way. Remembering someone, whether they are gone from our daily lives or from this world, and how memories can evolve or slightly change over the years.... and we hold on to them still. It made me think of those first images of someone, how they may evolve over time, and how our perspective may shift. We may not know how to deal with that. Or if our remembrance of someone is no longer protected in the way we wanted. Thought-provoking piece!

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      I know it’s different, still doubting my decision to post it :)
      Thank you MA!!

  • 3 years ago

    by prasanna

    I don't think the title fits this poem - claustrophobic emotions would mean that the emotions are sort of subdued, wanting to hide, but they're very evident in this poem. You've captured sonder perfectly - we're all subjected to time, a sort of tidal force that'll ebb and shape memories. There can often be a disconnect between reality and memories because of it.

    It's different from your other poems, but I do really like it :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      what I went for is those emotions makes you feel suffocated, like you know there’s nothing you can do and you’re trapped in that one emotion. But what you’re saying makes much more sense!!
      Thank you :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Time is the ruination of us all and as this poem said, we never do account for it until it's too late. The last line is definitely the kicker. That single line encapsulates loss through age magnificently. Milly x

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      Thank you Milly :)

      Good to see you around!!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    This is a very thought provoking piece and as the saying goes times stands for no man.
    Do take care, Em x

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      Thank you =)