Comments : finding parallels. (Collab with Star)

  • 2 years ago

    by BOB GALLO

    I don't know guys. I love you both as great poets and as individuals, but collaboration does not work for me. I can almost say which stanza is whose, and how each stanza assumes following a non existing theme. But, there, cannot be a theme in collaboration, the theme appears in the middle towards end approximately and often is not solid. We try to put on some make up to impress the readers with the personal skills, which brings a lots of "Likes." But they are often not rich in their poetical contents.
    Assuming the poetry is the production of inspiration first and then hard work, it is close to impossible to collaborate the same inspiration if there are two separate inspirations. No matter how skilfully we try to make it seamless still a careful eyes can detect the patches and seams.
    I hope you do not get offended with my opinion because we are here to be honest with each other, right? instead of praising one another senselessly.
    Also I know I could be wrong. It is just the matter of opinion perhaps.
    I think collaboration is good as practice rather than real poetry. And you too have a lots of chemistry together there.

    • 2 years ago

      by prasanna

      Art is subjective. Thank you for reading!

  • 2 years ago

    by BOB GALLO

    yes subjective, like truth. But what about objective truth??
    I am just kidding. I don't get surprised if this win this week, because of the technique.
    please keep on posting. You two bring warmth to this place.

    • 1 year ago

      by prasanna

      I'd ask you, can emotion and objective truth co-exist in art? Whenever you introduce emotion, there are conscious and subconscious biases being introduced into the art. What would you say is an example of art that contains both objective truth, and some form of emotion?

  • 1 year ago

    by Abstract Poet

    Love this poem it's beautiful.

  • 1 year ago

    by mistake

    This was the best read in my recent stint here, something I could not currently write and better than 99% of mainstream song lyrics making the rounds today. You make such a clear image that I feel as if I were there, in that moment. This is some of the peak of poetry for me.
    In short I believe this is material that would resound much further then the boundaries of this site.
    This is the kind of poem that may finally break me away from mostly rhyming poems.
    Recognition to star also x