No Comparison

by Eibutsina   Sep 21, 2004


Its like the amazing ocean flowing,
First splinter of light for the day showing,
The scent of a just blooming rose,
Feet in the sand while your wiggling your toes,
That warm shiver of a coastal breeze,
The changing colours of Autumn leaves,
Sounds of children excited to play,
Like staying in bed on a lazy Sunday,
Fresh coffee brewing, the smell of toast,
Being in the arms of the person you love most.

Like keeping warm by an open fire,
The hidden passion behind the deepest desire,
Strength of a roaring tidal wave,
A predominant hunger always wanting to crave,
Loud as the roar of a lions pride,
Those chocolate brown coloured eyes,
Trying not to fall into their depth,
Holding onto that very last breath,
The heat which your love can provide,
The warmth of how you make me feel inside.

A stomach full of butterflies,
The sound of our first childs cries,
Diamond shining and crystal clear,
Holding our beautiful baby here,
Theres no comparison to our joy,
Looking into the eyes of our baby boy,
Offering nothing but unconditional love,
Each day thanking the Lord above,
For giving us all we prayed him to be,
And delivering him to us safe and healthy.

Please VOTE and COMMENT Thanks everyone :o)

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  • 19 years ago

    by Angel Sanctuary ©

    Wow... Great poem.. I could see the things you described... And wow again very good... I bet your baby is the cutest things in the world... Though kids are nice when they can't talk but uhh wait till they do.... Cuz boy.. will they annoy you... Anyways.. again great poem... well detail and creative.. You obviously have a career in writing... remember me when you become famus.. help the little people out.. hehe joke Take Care
    Angel

  • 19 years ago

    by Semaran

    From the second line i knew that this was going to be a great poem and i have to say you dare not disappoint, Fantastic truly brilliant. This is what i was waiting for Erisa and im so very glad i have read such sophisticated expression. I loved your use of effective metaphors and similes, the first verse took me on a wondrous ride of familiarity and exploration. I know there’s probably little I could say that hasn’t already been covered but I really felt the need to express my adoration for this poem.
    A dedication to your son? I think that’s a part of it but to me there seems a little more than that.
    But in any event a marvellous work of art and Im sure that this one was very satisfying to write. As I so often say you have a great ability to express your emotions and feelings and as this poem has shown are most articulate in their expression.

    Thankyou

  • 19 years ago

    by FireCracker

    OMG.. gave it a 5 you know it ! HAHA! lol .. Really liked this one two thnx for your new commts .. they mean a lot and i am glad you liked my newer poems. . lol .. ill email ya soon hope to TTYL .. ! BYE GURL .. !

  • 19 years ago

    by Chelsey

    GEESH!!! man you got a way with words..As like the others im speechless too!! I mean that was so great! You said it so well and made me picture everything and every line and it was so heartful and warm..It was a ery nice dedication you and your son should be proud..I still am in shock i'm not sure what more to say,,,It was amzing Eirisa just like all of you other work!! Never stop with this talent!! Much love ~Chelsey~

  • 19 years ago

    by Kevin J

    Eirisa, I would say I'm speachless, but I have alot to say:p. I'm really impressed. You know I love all your writes, but this might be my favorite poem of yours to date. What awesome tribute to your son. The discription and flow are impeccable. Rhyming is perfect. It's was well thought out. It had a nice smooth forward motion to an outstanding end. Reading this was like a breath of fresh air...no lie...you totally had me feeling the ocean breaze on beach in the summer, then carried me into autumn an so on...awesome comparisons

    Basically it's an all around great poem. A poem all who read it will remember. It might sound like I over did it with this comment, but really meant every word;) You should be proud

    This is the ultimate dedication. Your son has a very loving and talented Mom;)

    MuchLove

    Kev