hey

Slick and vulgar! I loved it...Elliptical style, I am still left haunted by some of the words he!he!

Thank you for commenting on my work. I look forward to reading more.

Kind regards
Hayley

Very good. is there more? i know i am
in a serial mood hungry for cheerios.lol

Oh my! Isn't Don amusing!
(Ahem) I did like this one, jacki. I love the old twilight zone black and whites and when you wrote that it peaked my interest from the get-go.
Carrying a baby for thirty years was cool. I have never heard that idea ever written professionally or otherwise. But who was the person helping her and what was spinal fluid going to do for a baby/ Keep it moist?
Read my poem: "People of the Grave" I posted it soemtime ago.

ha, i lyke the ending. very well done!

i have one line that mentions "anti aging cream", thats what the spinal fluid is supose to do keep the doctor and his assisant "Elaine" young. For Elaine she needs to be young to feel the baby kick inside her because she has waited 30 years to give birth.

Thank you for all your comments ;)

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nice comment miranda........

Jacki..
this poem was Excellent...but I don't like or watch "twilight zone"...hehe...sry...but anyways I really liked it...i gave ya a 5...Keep on doing your great work...I read your other one.. I love it:D...
~Best of Luck~

**With Love Sedusha**

Thank YOu so much, i'm glad everyone likes them :)