Friendship gone

by ♥x__Pwincess danii//   Nov 6, 2004


We were the best friends
until he came along
he broke us up made me look like
i was in the wrong

can't you see?
its not mi fault
i feel as if our friendship
is locked up in a vault

he has the key
and won't give it back
our Friendship was a sea of white
now its just the sand of black

he thought i was getting in the way
of your romance
but friends should come first
please give me another chance

ill get out of the way
i promise i will
i just need our friendship back
because i miss you still

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  • 18 years ago

    by inlove

    reading** sorrY xX

  • 18 years ago

    by inlove

    gr8 poem, your good!
    thanks for ready mi other poem, so there u go thats wat hapn between me and Lindsay. xX

  • 19 years ago

    by jennifer

    Great poem:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacki

    i agree w/ eirisa, she is one of my favorite poets on here. She gives good adives. Anyways to the poem aside the message that your bringing the saddness that you feel. Friends they come and they go, you'll always find that through out your life. Don't get depressed over it. Take the bad with the good and strive for better.

    Now you need to fix some spelling errors of course lol.....And its kinda of staggering. One line i know you have to fix:
    i feel as if how friendship
    TO
    i feel as if our friendship

    But it was an ok poem again just on the spelling errors and the brokeness to it i would give you a 3. I also don't want to lower your score so i won't vote on this one.

  • That is indeed sad. Although the rhythm is a little too bouncy to be a serious poem. Anyway, i wish you the best of luck with your endeavors.