Wonderful write, smoldering, with erotic excellence!!!

Not just to be different, but, in my opinion, this poem is more vulgar teen s3xual innuendo than something describing a beautiful and/or positively memorable moment in a female\'s life [yours?]...

The constant use of colloquialism - /-\ss/c[]ck/d|ck - differs the poem from being something above love and something being simply about pleasure and s3x. Perhaps I am getting soppy and old fashioned here, but making love is quite different from having s3x. As I read your stanzas, I felt as if I was with a girl who I liked, yes, but did not love. I felt as if I was doing all the actions you described the male in your poem doing, but not because I *loved* the girl, more because she was enjoying herself... I was enjoying myself.

Furthermore, \"Its ok, baby, I\'m right here,\" strengthened my opinion that this poem is not about love, merely affection; physical or emotional I am still yet to decide, however, physical seems to be the more dominate inkling I have. Calling someone *baby* is hardly loving, caring or sensual.

\"My first time ever, It makes me glad
That I waited for someone who loved me for sure,
Instead of letting someone take me, then walk out the door.\"
- A good finish... if only I felt he really loved you and that the action undertaken in the poem was making love not merely having s3x.

[END OPINION]
(*sorry about the random symbols, couldn\'t type certain words*)

peace~
teys

Hey good poem but are you two still together? Just wondering he seems like an amazing, and paitent guy.

Omg tht is xcellent........kp it up :) x

Nice, i like it 5/5 check out some of my poems and tell me what you think
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ShOrTiE

Wow.u r a wonderful writer.deffiantly a turn on. soon u will be writing for sum PLAYBOY magazines and stuff.that was fabulous.i hope my first time is perfect like how u described it. keep up the good work!

Wow amazing really um dirty but i like it ur a smart girl :]

Very good poem, really enjoyed it, keep up the good work. Check on my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

5/5 oh wow thiz waz really deep but it waz an excellent poem....u did good az hell dont ler nobodi tell u any different iight, keeping writing

much luv
peachez

Wow very detailed.. but good

LOVE IT

Tht was awsome dude tht was a good idea to,too wait for the one special dude keep writing and stuff

5/5! Love it! And I don't get why people say its too much info..its in the explicit section for a reason!

The information is what make the poem so intense well done.:)

Wow, I LOVE IT!

Oh my god you know that had me in tears i dont know why just reminded me of my x we waited a year b4 we went for it and then after a year we broke up we still friends ahh u just made me miss how sweet he used to be

great poem keep d gud work. tc all the best

Nice...