by B4BY BLU3 X Dec 20, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
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How could you lie to me |
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Title dosen't really fit the poem. Your writing something completely different to what the title is then just trying to make it the same thing by adding that last line. So change the title and you've sorted it and again, try to make everything flow and make sense |
by MeL JoY
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thats a great poem.. yea i can relate to this feelings..great work!! |