Hear, look, listen

by ♥kHarIsMa♥   Dec 26, 2004


Hear my whispers,
hear my cries
look at me now,
look at my tear filled eyes.

hear me beg,
hear me plead
why cant we be together again,
you and me.

listen to my mind,
listen to my heart
i loved you to death,
from the very start.

look at my smile,
look at my stare
ill be here for you always,
i love you, i swear.

please rate and comment...and again i know its not the best poem but id appreciate it if you tell me what you think....ill greatly return the favor...thank you

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley

    5/5 very good poem stuck with the title, your a great writter hope to read more from you soon....

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    this is really very good, Kharisma... and I did give it a 5...becasue it wasn't lacking enough to be a 4... but if this were a 10 point scale, I may have dropped it to a 8 simply because....

    it has the potential to be so much more... and I know you have the talent to do it... it will be a good writing exercise even if you never post it...

    Just separate all the stanzas to the first two lines of each start with "Hear" "Look" or "Listen" and the next two lines of each stanza refer to the first two but don't start with those key words. You could have 2 stanzas for each... and the order could be "Hear, Look, Listen, Hear, Look, listen" or "Hear, Hear" Look, Look, Listen Listen" Have fun with it!

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