that poem is awesome so sad, im sorry for you loss i dont know what i would do if i lost my brother, great poem

a very good lesson learned driving is a serious things well done ...

Although your poem is not based a true life experience, it serves to illustrate a purposeful message about responsible driving.

With the use of vivid language to describe this tragic event and written with good rhthmic flow, you have created an exceptionally good poem.

Lovely poem, great flow, rhyme and phrasing. Deffinitely not bad at all. Well done, Take care :)

how could you even think that this is bad? i love it!!! i rate it a 5 all the way.

hey awesome poem i really love it, it's really well writen and creative, if u like poems like this u might wanna check out mine, keep up the writing!

~lil slam~

OMG im so sorry bout ur brother but all in all it was a good poem u can read some of mine if u like

Wow, truly depressing. You have a talent and it's shown in this piece. Great job, don't stop.

oh my god before i got done to the bottom i thought it had truely happen i can see why some people thought it was true. i understand how falling asleep at the wheel is very effective my friend had just fallin asleep at the wheel and had to be in the hospital for a couple days and hes lucky he is alive you actually got me to cry, it takes a lot of emotion to do that. great job love your poem.
teddy

Personal experience or not it was really well written...i bet it taught us all a valuable lesson...great job..keep it up
*XoX Sw33ti3*

This reminds me of watching my uncle and cousin die because a drunk driver felt like running a red light. We still haven't found him till this day.

Speechless....that's it....That poem was amazing....it brought tears....I just got 2 speeding tickets....both within the last month. I'm slowing down now.

~*~Christina~*~

Thanks guys for all the comments i really appreciate them they mean so much to me =) All your poems are awesome too...

Thanks guys,

xx, PorteR

Very nice job, I liked the way that you conveyed your emotion, then only critism I have of this is the one stanza:

How were you to know
It was your brother on the road?
You just had to get home to sleep
Or you thought you might explode.

It seems to bbe a forced rhyme, other than that it was brilliant, nice job!

omg that was awsum!
and its on my broz bday aswel hehe
keep it up babe
luv me