Comments : Speeding

  • 16 years ago

    by Kia

    that poem is awesome so sad, im sorry for you loss i dont know what i would do if i lost my brother, great poem

  • 16 years ago

    by bucky

    a very good lesson learned driving is a serious things well done ...

  • 16 years ago

    by Lydia O

    Although your poem is not based a true life experience, it serves to illustrate a purposeful message about responsible driving.

    With the use of vivid language to describe this tragic event and written with good rhthmic flow, you have created an exceptionally good poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    Lovely poem, great flow, rhyme and phrasing. Deffinitely not bad at all. Well done, Take care :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrea

    how could you even think that this is bad? i love it!!! i rate it a 5 all the way.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    hey awesome poem i really love it, it's really well writen and creative, if u like poems like this u might wanna check out mine, keep up the writing!

    ~lil slam~

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachele

    OMG im so sorry bout ur brother but all in all it was a good poem u can read some of mine if u like

  • 16 years ago

    by Erica Brown©

    Wow, truly depressing. You have a talent and it's shown in this piece. Great job, don't stop.

  • 16 years ago

    by unprotected lover

    oh my god before i got done to the bottom i thought it had truely happen i can see why some people thought it was true. i understand how falling asleep at the wheel is very effective my friend had just fallin asleep at the wheel and had to be in the hospital for a couple days and hes lucky he is alive you actually got me to cry, it takes a lot of emotion to do that. great job love your poem.
    teddy

  • 16 years ago

    by Sw33ti3

    Personal experience or not it was really well written...i bet it taught us all a valuable lesson...great job..keep it up
    *XoX Sw33ti3*

  • 16 years ago

    by Halston Mather

    This reminds me of watching my uncle and cousin die because a drunk driver felt like running a red light. We still haven't found him till this day.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kris Lynn

    Speechless....that's it....That poem was amazing....it brought tears....I just got 2 speeding tickets....both within the last month. I'm slowing down now.

    ~*~Christina~*~

  • 16 years ago

    by .x.PorteR.x.

    Thanks guys for all the comments i really appreciate them they mean so much to me =) All your poems are awesome too...

    Thanks guys,

    xx, PorteR

  • 16 years ago

    by Leah20

    Very nice job, I liked the way that you conveyed your emotion, then only critism I have of this is the one stanza:

    How were you to know
    It was your brother on the road?
    You just had to get home to sleep
    Or you thought you might explode.

    It seems to bbe a forced rhyme, other than that it was brilliant, nice job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Amy

    omg that was awsum!
    and its on my broz bday aswel hehe
    keep it up babe
    luv me