Wow!!! When I read your poem, I feel like a spell has been cast over me... Its a really awsome poem, Great Poem, Keep on writing... Can't wait to read the next one...
*Meagan*

Good poem. I give it a five, it is a good use of how you feel inside on a painting.

Very good Metaphore. I think that was probably the best one i seen in a long time.

Good job.

Five/Five

Tiffy omg I LOVE THIS POEM! You are soo amazingly talented girl! It flowed so perfectly. The entire poem is amazing! Keep the great work coming!

~Kelly

Liked the metaphor, but I've enjoyed some of your other poems more than this one, like Lethe or Whiter Shade of Pale. I found this to be a little repeditive.

However, your comment at the top of this made me laugh: your friends say you "use too many big words". If I had a penny for every time i heard that phrase I .... well... I'd have a lot of useless currency, I guess. If the words are essential to the "feel" of the poem then they're worth including, unless they make it seem stilted. I suspect the way you changed this poem by getting rid of certain words changed the "feel" of it a little.

-paperdoll

Wow such a creative and great poem. Really really loved it. See Ya!

OMG ur poem rocks out of this world I loved everything about it. 5/5

hey
thanx for commenting on my poem.........but i have to say that its nothing compared to this....its amazing i LOVE it..... the way everything flows together and the words you use its just......i'm speechless its just so great.
keep up the writting because your great at it!!!!

love
~darkest~angel~

You changed the grammar of a poem because your friends are to unintelligent to understand it?

Shame on you and them.

Actually, I'm quite happy they told me to quit with the constant big-word thing. It gave me a chance to explore imagery instead of constant vocabulary which, as i am sure you will agree, does not make a poem all by itself.
^^
Still, I DO see your point, no denying...

Ok, Well i'm kind of an idiot, and dont understand many things..so therefore i didnt understand half of this lol, but from what i did understand it was great!!!! I can honestly say, i have never seen a writer like you before!! your amazing 5/5

Wow. I really don't know what to say. This poem is great. It was...different. But I really, really like it. The flow was great and I saw absolutely no big words in it. =] So it is easy to understand. Haha. =]

Good job hunn.

Wow excellent!! i love this poem!! keep up the great work!! =]

Thanx for your comment hun. thought i'd check out some of your other poems! i love this one. it is so rich in imagry and every word you use seems to fit perfectly with what you are trying to convey. beautiful in the darkest way. x

Wow...amazing. really well writen...beautiful. i love it!
good job

Oh by the way thanks for the comment

You really know how to get your feelings accross. I thought this would be happy, but you successfully made painting evil! Haha, but really, its quite lovely.

I totally understand this poem. It very good and has a fast pace. I love it. 5/5

Fifty one reviews, huh? You devil you, and I only say that because I'm giving you the fifty second. Wow. (I'm lucky enough I get two)
I felt the same thing I always do when I read your poetry. Love. And no, I'm not in love with you, but the way you express words into this beautiful art!
Keep being a lovely writer.

Yours truly,
Dailin Coldfire.

Fifty one reviews, huh? You devil you, and I only say that because I'm giving you the fifty second. Wow. (I'm lucky enough I get two)
I felt the same thing I always do when I read your poetry. Love. And no, I'm not in love with you, but the way you express words into this beautiful art!
Keep being a lovely writer.

Yours truly,
Dailin Coldfire.

Life is nothing but dark colors waiting to seep into hope and turning everything grey. I loved this one, simple but the colors mean more the just what we see.