by Tiller Jan 23, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
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You may not know the truth yet |
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Awesome poem, I agree that it needs a little work on the rhythm, and the rhyming seemed a little forced. Otherwise excellent. Take care and keep writing |
by Brookeღ
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Very well done for someone so young I have a son ur age. U have talent so keep writing! Check out mine if u would Thanx! |
by Janie
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i liked it!!! you'll be quite talented when you get older... i'm just a little older than you... so.. .haha good luck |
by Chad Reamer
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it needs better rhythm,not rhyme but like rhythm |