umm truthfully, the rhyme scheme and the structure was great and it was all there but it lacks to make sense in my eyes...i have a friend whos dad is Schitzophrenic and another friend whos brother is...what i understand from them is its an ongoing process of paranoia but you state you want them to be there...i'm confused, i dont think you deserve the low score however b/c the poems structure was wonderfully done so i'm goin to give you a 4 but i'm off to check out more poems
love Heather.

I can't believe that the other people thought this was a 3! 5 ALL THE WAY!

this could be better. the title and the poem dont fit. but it was pretty good. a lil work and you'll have it!!
*~*Soldier Lover*~*

Sad, but good. Keep up the good work!
-Kate

Loved it!!!!! it was great. Keep it up!

It was really nice. you really did a great job there. With some work you can make it a lot better. Just keep writing practice makes perfect. Still great work!!! 5/5 =)

this reads like a song...i love the flow....but the title hmmmm could be better

I liked it, i liked how u left it some what open for the readers mind to kinda take ahold of it! keep of the good work and please return the favor!!!
gREAT WORK
Danielle

It is a nice poem!

hey that was awsome...
the first verse i xpecially like...
mostly becuz thats how i feel right now..
well im giving you a five...
cuz thats as i as i can...
i'd rather give you a ten...
well tmb...
*kathleen*

I keep going back to this poem, i love it, i feel alott the same, try reading a few of mine, i can tell you'd relate to them

Very lovely poem. I thought that the last line "You'll be around till I go" was a little outside from the rest of the poem, but other than that, the poem was great.

~*~Christina~*~

great poem! I really liked the
Tired awake,
And active sleeping.
My eyes can't cry,
But my heart is weeping

Your a great writer! Keep it up!

You have great talent for expression.

If the truth be told,
I want you near.
But you being around,
Is my deepest fear.

Loved these lines. They really express the dilemma well.
Great job keep writing.

This poem was alright but felt more like a narrative though your emotions are clear and blended with your words. My suggestion: Maybe go deeper with your descriptions.

These words help me understand you.
I love the way it is written, rhymes and "flows".
I envy your ability.
..xx