i liked this one! very creative with great meaning. it was different but very sufficient in a way, keep on writing. xxx

Very well written. Keep it up =)

thank you for the honest critique...i vary from long lines to short lines at times..

anyways for some reason i dont really like this poem, i like the idea, the theme but the variety of words used was not full enough and i'm not jus saying that cuz u were honest with me....u didnt hurt my feelings jus thought iwould tell u the truth

n e ways later..
love Heather.

Awesome poem! lol. you wrote it with a lot of wit, in my 'opinion' it could even be seen as humourous.:P. creatively done, nice work! If you have time, vote or comment on some of mine, thx.
-Rach

short but gets a great point across. awesome job.

I like it a lot! 5.

Wow. Short and sweet and original and I love it! awesome job!

different, short, and to the point! 5/5 good job
*~*Soldier Lover*~*

good good... short but right to the point...xox Sherrie