Why should I wake up?

by Ksusha   Mar 8, 2005


Why should I wake up
if your right here
next to me?

Why should I wake up
if your strong arms
are wrapped around me

Why should I wake up
if your lips
are still upon me

Why should I wake up
if your words
sound so sweet to me

Why should I wake up
if in reality
you turn away from me

--please comment and vote ... wrote it on a whim but has a lot of emotion in it.---

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  • 17 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    It was a good read, but i felt like it wasnt over... i think you need another stanza to wrap up the text.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I like the way you formared this cute poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Rusted x Heart

    This was quite nice, I liked the shortness and clarity of it. also quite liked how you turned things around in the end, especially because it stands out as it almost changes the flow of the poem with that one line. Well done!

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I really liked this one. Although I could kind of foresee where you were going from the beginning, it was very touching and I'm sure it’s something most people can relate to. You did well putting across the desperate feelings of wanting this person that only wants you in return in your dreams.
    The only suggestion I would make is about the use of question marks. You used one in the first stanza but then never again. To tidy up the poem either, use them in every stanza, or not at all.
    Well done, a lovely and moving poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    CUTE I can relate alot to that, i hate waking up lol

    awsome write