Fate

by Holly   Mar 10, 2005


Inside I live a thousand thoughts
While the one I need sits and rots
I will never see it til' the end
My life is fate, it will not mend
I can't fix the mistakes that I made
I can't rewind the games I've played
but your the one I would never use
If I had one wish I'd have to choose
to take back whatever I did to you
That made you not love me too
Maybe it wasn't me that did wrong
Maybe it was you that wasn't strong
Or maybe this was meant for me
Maybe we're not meant to be
I'll have to find someone new
to love me unconditionally true
After I live out every thought
I'll look back and see what has rot
I'll think is it my fault, or did you do this to me?
No, Fate decided it was meant to be.

Hey if you can take the time to read my poem, why don't you just vote, it only takes a couple seconds. Hey if your really nice you could write me a comment. I just look for the feedback, not the awards. Thanx

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  • 18 years ago

    by Z

    This is by far my favorite!

  • 19 years ago

    by misty

    i have read your profile and i must say that your poem really contrasts to what your 'file says! That doesn't mean I didnt like it, however. It just proves how human you are - we all have ups and downs and i'm glad you blame fate andnot yourself for this particular down. lots of love misty

  • 19 years ago

    by Dorotea©

    I personally really liked this poem, though I agree with Dark Savior that maybe it needs structure. But over all, I think it's really good and i'll give you 5/5 cuz it obviously took some time writing and came from the heart.
    SatuzKa

  • 19 years ago

    by Chad Reamer

    really good poem.loved it 5/5.keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    decent poem, you need to put more structure into your poems. I think that you lack that in a big way. You have a problem with it, they are just one continues sentence because there is nothing that devides them. But the feeling and the thought and effort were definately all there. Good job on your poem, work abit on your structure and you will bloom into a wonderful poet.

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