hey i think the title should be
through these brown eyes

Sad poem, really sad.....Is this true??? Well, I read a book once, it was about a boy who wnet through this (Dave Pezler, do you know him??)!! Great poem, it spoke to my heart and I don't think that you should change the ending, I love this one!!!

thanx guys! i'm thinking about making it longer though but i'm still not sure if it should have a happy or sad ending...(Dave Pezler)is that the guy in the book A Child Called It?
well thanx again....any more ideas anyone?
xxxChristinaxxx

wow its really good already, i dont know any ideas, but i dont know i'm always sad, sad endings always go good with my poems, but i think you should try to make it happy but if the effect changes then make it a sad ending because the effect is already so powerful you dont want to ruin it! keep it up!

wow great poem.. 5/5 for this one =) I like this poem a lot.. keep it up! Take care, hugs

Really great start you have here. That was full of emotion and just so heart-wrenching. Be sure to notify me when it's finished. I think that the title will present itself as you finish this work, and that it should come from you and not someone else. Keep it up!

Wow..... how amazing, very sad. Brought tears to my eyes.. -5
why don't you call it 'Broken Beauty'?
just an idea.. lemme know what you decide on!!
*~*Soldier Lover*~*

thanks I love that idea I might just do that!

I think it all was great! I think you should call it .... "A Beautiful Chilid" or something along those lines. I love the ending and I think you should leave it how it is.. I think what comes to mind first is the best thing to chose. I like it alot! 5/5

much love
savannah

thanks alicia I think I'll do that....

Wow thats a great poem! I really don't know what a good title would be!
Maybe something like "Broken Heart!" 5/5
Luv Christina

Great poem! sad but good and I think you should have a happy ending being as though that girl went through so much all ready

ok i think u should make it the child dies but her ghost like hauts the parents 4 eternety making their lives hell

That's exactly how my parents treat me sometimes, except i have an older brother and he treats me like shit too!