Great work..keep them coming.Jeff

Nice write, don't be sad and don't think that way! :) smile please!
5/5. Take Care, Always Believe in Love, Amit

I've felt that way, and this was very well written, but remember someone always cares! Keep it up and smile as much as you can :) xxx

Nice write, But you're wrong, I do care. You take care and love ya bunches, hugs, lots of love *Ann*

Very sad poem....things will get better, trust me.

Jesse

Amanda......if it makes you think any different, I would certainly listen, care and notice! I have something very special coming very soon so please look for it. I started last evening and will try to complete it today. I love your words to me. Thank you and I too, wait with great anticipation to hear your words again.

Exactly how I feel all the time!! Great work!! XOXO, Jennifer

wow excellent poem! i love it, i feel like this so many times in my life! really captured the feeling!

~PLP~ lil slam~ lots of hugs and love~

Amanda..I don't want to waste space in comments so check for message in Members Message Forum under the heading MU4AB. I reread this poem because I've been feeling a little down lately. Yours' are always the very best for me.

It's a good poem, and i liked it for the short snappyness of it but it seems very solid in theme, like there is only one interpretation possible from it and it lacks a poemy feel to it.

You've wrote better, but this is still a good piece, only thing i can suggest is improve the flow between lines as everytime you see 'I could' (to me) it's hard to get back into the rythum of it.

This is, as Sean said, a good poem

Yet i feel it lacks something...

pardon me if my English sucks right now, but I am seriously drunk.

The problem with this one is that it remains the same from beginning to end. There is no progress.

I think, and this is probably just me, that you need a conclusion. Try so surprise the reader..

peace..

By the way..

I recall one starlit night.
Like a thief before the kill,
the wind blew, oh, so light.
and stole my sense away.
I threw one oar in the water
and thrusted it down with the other
and broke the second in two

This line, in my poem the river, tells of how I would gladly lose myself in someone....

It's so sad! I also sometimes feel this way. Love your work.

Great poem i feel the same!!!!!

WOW your sure do have a way of transporting emotions with words. I love how you have constructed this and how you have conveyed the desperate lonliness.

Short and simple i like it

Many people care even now years after you have written this wonderful piece, I have been away for a while, not incarcerated but just lost my desire to write, and here I am again reading and thinking of others. keep up the great work. your friend harry