The Pro's And Con's Part 1

by Lecrissa   Apr 23, 2005


The positive side

There should be rejoicing
Through out the lands
People hugging, kissing
And holding hands

Theres a young man helping
someone to cross the street

There are ladies out there
That donate the things
Others may need

There are children out there
Who spend their free time
Helping out being a sick and lonely
persons friend

There are generous people
Willing to open up their homes
And give out a hot meal to those
Who roam

There are so many people
Who strive to be the best they can
And still find time to help
Their fellow man

There are many good deeds
Done through out the lands
By people who care
And understand

There are so many deeds
Yet to be done
By the generations
Still to come

Any suggestions to make this poem better would be appreciated. The flow needs help.

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  • 18 years ago

    by †JustAri†

    again, the way life SHOULD be. Very good. :) Peace! //ari\\

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*Ley*~

    it seemed rather choppy. but the message again, is very good
    ~Freak~

  • 19 years ago

    by chloe

    gud poem, great topic... rhyming is a little poor in some places... but not enough to spoil the poem so great job!

  • 19 years ago

    by Robert

    A great poem and well put I was very pleased. Soft but powerful great job Read Never-Ending Gift

  • 19 years ago

    by AntiSocial16

    yes, the rythm does need just a bit of help, but otherwise it is a terrific start! i liked this one! and i think im going to read part 2 now, cuz i guess that would be the sensible thing to do. stay safe, strong, and healthy!
    AntiSocial16
    ps: thanks for the comment on my "Today...Tomorrow" poem as well!