A dim skyline set on black curtains

by deadnalone   May 1, 2005


This is really different to my usual style and i would really appreciate it if anybody would read and comment/vote on this one. Thank you.

Open your eyes.
A dim skyline on a black curtain.
What does it mean?
You don't quite know.

Staring into the dim skyline set on the black curtains you see a figure.
A man standing tall and strong.
With a prominent jaw line.
You see all of this in a silhouette.

Look a little further down the dim skyline set on the black curtains and everything becomes dark.
Shadows mock shadows upon the black curtains.
And everything turns pale.

Grey.
A woman.
Stood in the frame of a window.
Can see nothing but what is behind her eyes.
Tattooed.
Her sins.
Pale as the shadows.

Close your eyes.
You see her tattoos.
The simple sins.
The pain and regret.
Blood washes over it all.

Your eyes are open again and the dim skyline set on the black curtains shows you something new.
A little girl with her new toys.
A pack of colored crayons.
All red. Crimson. Every one.
Her head snaps up and the vision of her possessed eyes haunts you.
Shocked. You turn away.

A boy climbing a roof in the dim skyline on the black curtains.
No.
He isn't climbing.
Look closer.
Closer.
See his face. See his thoughts.
He is letting go.
No accident.
He let himself go.
For that is why he was there.

You shake your head because your eyes spin and your thoughts are twisted.
You don't believe any of this do you?

Open your eyes again.
There.
In that window.
A woman standing tall and strong.
With a prominent jaw line.
That is what you saw before.
Isn't it?

There.
A man stood in the frame of a window.
Tattooed behind his eyes are his sins.
Grey and covered in blood.
That is what you saw before.
Isn't it?

There now.
A little boy.
Playing with his crayons.
Every one a deep shade of violet.
He stares at you with his demon eyes.

Now there.
A girl climbing a roof.
Look closer.
A girl falling from a roof.
A girl who let herself go.
For that is why she was there.

You shake your head for a third time. Is it the third time? Or am I just telling you that?
You can't be sure can you.
And that is when it all goes out of focus.
A dim skyline on black curtains fades into Grey. White now.

Pure. Clean. White.

That is what you saw before.
Isn't it?

*All votes and comments greatly appreciated as always*

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lemma

    Hey, really gud poem. Kinda gave the creeps lol. Keep writin hun. xx ltp

  • 18 years ago

    by Toni

    I agree with Nada..i absolutely loved the imagery, i could picture so clearly what you were describing. This is one of your best pieces in my view. Can't really find any faults with it at all! Brilliant xxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by deadnalone

    thankyou i really apreciate that, a proper decent analysis, i very rarely get anything close, thank you

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Wow...I'm speechless! This is brilliant! It was so intriguing and deep! Well done...Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by deadnalone

    ooops thanks heather *looks embarrassed* lol i bet i spelt embarrassed wrong as well didnt i!