Hey! I really liked this one, the repetition made me eager to move on and the rhyming was very good. very well written. keep writing. xxx

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Very nice poem. I like the way it was written. Keep writing.

-Ice

this story was ok, but the repition of the first three lines made it hard to follow... but still pretty good.

I think the flow could use some work. The repetion was effective, though it wasn't too different from what I tend to read. Nice job though.

Excellent poem! 5 for sure. It flowed very nicely and i can really relate to this poem! <3

I loved it katie!! I really did. Very sad and emotional. Makes you think about life in general. -Mike

excellent choice of words. I enjoyed reading it. take care, Marjan

The repiition worked well in places, but not in others. By the end of the poem I was a little fed up with the lack of much new description.

Stay Inspired
Nici

I love poems like this. I don't know why but I'm a really big fan of suicide poems. I think you should read my either Last Testament of a Dying Soul or Deadly Whispers. There almost like this one. I loved it so freaking much. I loved it more than hershey kisses. (and I love those alot : ) Good job. 5/5 kilman = David B.

deadly poem...the stanzas were good and short and all the same lenght...it flowed well :)

Wow, really powerful words. I really liked how you used the first two lines in each stanza. The end moral was really meaningful. 5/5
~Emmy

Nicely done nicely done! you did a great job, i liked the idea of it all!!! great job!! 5/5

Suicide never solves anything!!!! but this was a good poem...never stop writng 5/5

oh man! cool poem! i love the repeditive lines you got goin on in that poem!! cool beans!! nice job, again!
abcede ^.^

The Sitting there part is very catchy :)

The Sitting there part is very catchy :)

Good very good, 5/5 I love your tecnique, very unique....
Ash