I saw a broken angel

by sarah   Jun 19, 2005


I saw a broken angel,
Her wings layed on the ground,
Her halo around her neck,
Being choked without a sound.

Someone didn't like her,
No one loved her anymore,
She now lays in the devils darkness,
Evil to the core.

How did she change?
She was an angel from the start,
Who was the one that choked her?
Was it you that broke her heart?

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  • 20 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Short poem but I think you did a good job on it. Yes I agree with Silver that it's been used many times but each poem has meaning to the writer. Very well done! Take Care! Brooke~

  • 20 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    This poem subject of a “broken angel” is terribly cliché and indeed has been used too many times. You’ve also made a spelling mistake twice with the same word, you have “chocked” it should be “choked.”
    The style in which you have written the poem allows the clichéd subject to gain a metaphorical meaning. What I mean is your poem suggests that a young lady suffering from a broken heart is being compared to the broken angel, I liked this.
    The ending metaphorical question worked well too.
    Decent poem, keep writing.

  • 20 years ago

    by LAST RONIN

    Ronin Likes this one.. 6.11 on 6.66 Ronin Scale

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