It's not a situation I've been in, but great writing, happy bday btw if its your bday, haha, nicely done newayz, keep it up and i enjoyed it! 5/5

so they forgot about your b-day? :'( hey i didnt forget i just didnt know :) lol sorry happy b-day if it is.....good poem 5/5

Wow, thats great language, so sasd, so brilliantly written, i like the way you put it together- keep it up!
luv kt

this poem is very well written and it has a good flow to it. 5/5
much love, Marjan

Aww...Happy belated b-day hun...I know how you feel. My parents always forgot about my birthday...even about my existance. But just think about how much better you have it than other kids hun...then you wont feel so bad. xxx

:( my bday sucked too...

cool poem! and good idea on the subject! great job
peace,
Abcede :P

Nice poem, birthdays are always special moments...

hAPPY belated b-day! sry it was so bad feel better 5

Happy Belated B-day Hope you feel better! 5

the repetition was really strong in this one.
it was a terrific piece
and the sort of mystery in the final stanza makes it really moving
great job 5/5

This could have been the very worst God forsaken thing I've ever written and I would never say QUIT writing. If you can write down what you feel in your heart and be happy with it then it is truly perfect. Write because you LOVE it not because WE tell you to.

Excellent write! I love the way it flowed and the emotion the reader takes in while reading it. I wanted to hug her...(Hopefully it wasn't you) :) You portrayed the pain it caused very clearly.....nicely done!!

I've ever READ^

Lost my thought---lol Sorry about that.

Thats a truly magnificent piece.I truly loved it.