Well writen hon, I give you 5/5 .

oooo thats good!!!! i like it alot

How did she write that out if she were drowning?

Otherwise, it's not bad.

i liked this poem alot. it ryhmed very well. awesome job

very intresting! i love the story line you created! nice job!

That was sad.....5/5

Interesting poem! I liked it a lot! I hope you get better abt it and i think that person is not worth it at all! Keep it up

interesting kinda sad, but overall it showed real good emotions.

omg, that is spectacular! i love, absolutly love it, definutly my favorite!! i like writing short stories too, and this is a five out of five, no doubt! i can'tget over this one! it's so good! it was sad, but expressed so much emotion, oh, geez, i was cought right in the story! great job!!!