Good poem. The idea of repeating "can't he see" worked to some extent, however I feel it began to drag on toward the end. Also the "Can't he see?
Can't he see?
Can't he see....
Can't he see I love him????"
was unnecessary, I personally think it would have been better with out that at the end. Some of the descriptions you used worked well and gave a depth to the poem. Overall not bad, but as with all poems there is room for improvement.

I liked the poem, and i think it had some really good description, but it felt like the description was an after thought. I really like the subject and what it is you are saing :D

I LIKED THAT ALOT i saved you as a favorite

i love this poem

wow.. nice... i like this poem.. keep the good job.

Great poem! It was insightful and truthful. I got a little mixed up in the words in the 2nd stanza, but it's 10:33pm, so I'm just a bit too tired to follow a poem that closely right now. Anyway, I really enjoyed it, especially how it all led up to the last two lines - keep it up!
-Kate

nice poem, its not often you hear about guys being used by girls in the game of love. great repitition to. Keep up the good work!

Take Care,
Renee

This poem didn't have a very good flow but I loved the meaning. I felt like you were standing in my shoes. You feelings were shown very well. Great write

that is so sweet!!! nice job!!

excellent! xxx

*dedicated to all guys out there that need to open their eyes to everything around them, and everyone...*

O yeah! okay down to critics, I don't think this poem needs any changing, for when you change one thing you change the rest. and I woulden't want this poem to change.
I wonder, how long have you been writing?

Yea, I agree with you...Guys need to open their eyes somethimes and look out onto the world with an open mind

Good Job!
CK♥

A really expressive poem with a sorrowful twist at the end.. I really like it. :)