Peaceful Tranquility.

by Kane Burden   Jul 20, 2005


Sun shining bright in the sky
Though the clouds leave me in shadow.
The Computer in front is distorting me
Gradually loosing power.

Why is it this micro chip cant keep up?
Technology advancing at a tremendous speed
but still not fast enough

Thoughts rushing through my head
Trying to keep up
Letting out a buzz
Before suddenly turning off..

Have a plan, and begin to follow it
Saving along the way
Gradually obtaining more knowledge
And then i hibernate

peaceful tranquility for the next 9 hours
Charging overnight
Waking up early,
back at work 8 o'clock.

I hate feeling like a computer
feeling as if I'm not in control
But i am the master of my fate
The user of my soul.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sabine Taylor

    Great write ! The idea of feeling like a computer is remarkable.

    Lots of love
    Sabine

  • 18 years ago

    by Desert Rose

    Damnn!! that was AMAZING...Keep it up!! The end rocked the most...."But I am the master of my fate....The user of my soul" Perfect

  • 18 years ago

    by Mandy Lou

    See, metaphors...You're an awesome writer and you see things for what they are! Keep it up! I've read all of them! lolz! Happy thoughts!
    ~ * Mandi * ~

  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    Love it :) Flows ever so nicely...

    One tiny suggestion:

    "But i am the master of my fate
    I control my soul. "

    I think it might be better as "But i am the master of my fate,
    Controller of my soul.

    *shrugs* Thanks again for commenting ;)

    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Pete

    really nice poem

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