great poem..5/5..i felt that way...i feel that way...well keep writing and keep your head up..and check out minesz to when you get the chance..
*-SadGirl-*

Omg...i think every one goes through that at one point in there life........so good...5-5

Such a strong and emotional piece. I love it! I didn't expect it to end like that. -I am confused though about ONE part...."No one was there to save her
Lying dead upon the ground

Everyone tried to talk to her" First you say no one was around and then you said everyone tried to talking to her.

All in all I thought it was a great poem with and amwesome little twist even though it's a bit sad.

She was simply made for him
The thing was, he couldn't see

you really have a way with words.

Lv A, x

That's how it is the one you want the most you cant have but in the future youll find the right one

The form is just excellent...I'm more of a free verse kind of poet myself...I couldn't do something like that...beautiful work....especially with the ending.

xxx

WOW! that was an excellent poem! soo emotional and very well done. Also the flow was great! And the ending really surprised me, wasn't expecting that lolz....Keep up da awesome work!! 5/5 =D
~Luvz~
~Chica~
xoxo