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Youve got writing potential....but u just gotta arrange your poems a bit...i find the rhyming a tweeny bit...disorganized..but..its not bad...i give it a 4:D

It's good... I like the poem itself.... but if i were you I would change:

I hear the voices of my past.
I make the cast form my past.

becuase you rhymed past and past it's a bit BLEUAH so i would suggest changing it to something like

I hear the voices of my past.
falling deep, falling fast

and another thing i would change would be:

I have longed to be here.
Now that I am here I feel fear.

The second line to that drags on, why not try something more like:

I have longed to be here.
But since I have felt fear...

it seems to flow a bit better... A good poem and i quite liked it
also another htin is that you start each line with a capital which makes the poem a bit harder to read....

However it's your poem and you can write it however you want....

Keep on writing and never stop!

-Lyd

A very good poem i liked it 5/5

great stuff

wow thats realy gd 5/5 keep up woth the good work xxxx