Dorture means room as in bedroom

It seems like restricting yourself to a list form degraded the feeling of the piece, but having it so confined made your point as clear as day, therefore, I like it.

I think the rhymes are a bit simplistic on this, but this doesn't seem to matter. Almost adds to the simplicity of your pain that you express in this poem. Good structure. Well done.

Whoa thats a really neat idea for a poem. I raelly liekd how you could feel the emotion in this poem, good job

Great job on this one. Its really good. I really like the twist on it. WOW 5/5

Great poem! It totally relates to a recent relationship of mine.

Hey hunny I'm sorry that happened to you but looks like I'm in the same situation. Did u leave him? If so how did you do it

This poem well displays the heartbreak of broken love. Good write, you portray your emotions well.

Christa

I hate you more than I love me,
I hate you girl, why can’t you see?

I dont understand the first line of this...but maybe its just me i dunno.. This is a really good poem and it reminds me of something in the past. You have a great talent and you did a great job on this poem! 5/5 Awesome job.
Becky
xseveredxandxbrokenx

This is really, really good. I really love it and think it is really well written. i love the structure of the poem. great job.

Yours sincerely

Andrew Brian Kirkman

Love it lol

Great poem i really feel the same!!!1

This is an excellent poem! well done, you are a really good writer! 5/5, keep up the great work! bec xox

Wonderful work. very heart felt! it engaged me, and i loved it the whole way through. good language too.

Ruby

At times, I feel people in this world, just do not understand very well, in general. Many times, I feel alone from all my trials and when having little friends. I would enjoy talking to you sometime?

By the way, I love your poem... It's greeeat! Very well expressed! Thanks again for sharing.

***Big Hugs****

Michelle

I loved the poem. It had a lot of emotion and really brings you in. You have great talent. Keep it up. 5/5

Great! very well-written!! Awesome job! 5/5

WOW!!! I can agree with everythin in this 1... It wis very touchin to me.... My husband (X) lied to me when he left me..... i have some poems bout him..... feel free to comment and rate them... K oh 5/5

If I'm perfectly honest this seemed a very ordinary poem. There wasn't anything that stood out and made it "special." I liked the idea of putting what he should have said and what he did say. Then the repetition of "I'm sorry" and "I hate you" worked well too. It's just the rhyming was a bit predictable, I mean how many poems rhyme heart with apart and cry with bye. Maybe using some more creative words would give your work a boost, www.thesaurus.com is a good tip. Anyway, keep writing.

Very nice... like I said before you are an amazing writer... now one of my favorites... keep it up

sammie