SiLeNt TeArS

Hey ... um i forgot your name lol but i luv it .. its true im a lot like you. im always up beat and hyper no one would ever guess i could be sad. and i always try to hide my feelings. you do a great job and to me it doesnt seam like your just starting out. your doing great i hope you get another one in soon. luv always -bree-

Hi darling.. ur poem was really great.. so much emotion put into it.. also thankz 4commenting on mine.. ur a greaty writter keep it up hun! mwaz Stephy Xx

Hey, this is casey, I am 15 also, and I love all of the poems and quotes that you are writing. Keep up the good work. I just read everything on this website, and It just amazes me how talented some of these teenagers are. Your poems are really good, and you need to check out mine and comment sometime. thanks for everthing. Keep writing.
~casey~

Hey ya babe i lyk dis one n i found lots of emotion in it ist reli sad as wel..keep it up though
luv ya tc
luv ya mwaz
luv dia xoxoxox

You focussed more on the rhyming than the actual words and I think it interferred with what you were wanting to say. Good idea, but you shuold try to write it without rhyme.
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