Comments : As long as I have you (Rhyme)

  • 14 years ago

    by Katrina Boblina

    Hey that's pretty good. I liek tihs poem and the idea is cool It flowed well:)

  • 14 years ago

    by SammiBABY

    Very sweet! lovely contribution

    sammi x

  • 14 years ago

    by Unrequited

    Wonderful job on this one!! i love it!

  • 14 years ago

    by nikki

    Great poem i really loved it keep up the good work 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Carmen

    Aw! that was so amazingly sweet!

  • 14 years ago

    by amelia

    It has a nice flow goth...sometimes..all we need is the one we love beside us & we couldn't worry bout the world...!

  • 14 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    I like it, well done indeed. Your word choices fit wonderfully, and your rhyme is solid throughout. I think any girl would love for this to be about her.

  • 14 years ago

    by Bursonater

    I like that, its an excellent piece- short but effective and flows well. It is sort of a poem that tells a story with out meaning to if that makes any sense at all, love it,

    Lenny

  • 14 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Aww how sad and sweet...excellent job..

  • 14 years ago

    by Jamie

    Thats SOOO sweet

    Its tears of joy,
    That ran down your cheek,
    One' for every second,
    That you didnt speak.

    that was my favorite stanza yay for you it was amazing

    Its never been the same,
    From that moment on,
    When I asked you to marry me,
    And we became one.

    that was my least favorite because you broke your rhyme scheme

    good job though 5/5 NICE

  • 14 years ago

    by William Flores

    Great poem goth. I like the flow that it has as well as how you express yourself in it. keep writing...

    and thanx for commenting on my poem.

  • 14 years ago

    by nikki

    Omg!!! u are like an natural born writer great job i really loved it keep up the good work 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Atomic

    Excellent!

    I absolutley heart it, it left me breathless.

    Nicely done.

    My favourite lines were:

    "Let them talk,
    And do what they do,
    It doesn't matter to me,
    As long as I have you."

    That was super sweet. =)

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 14 years ago

    by Britney

    Awwl.. very nice poem.. i especailly liked the ending.. it had a nice food great job 5/5!

  • Baeutiful... i rated 5 ... wow the poem is just wow...wonderful rhyming...keep up the good work

  • 14 years ago

    by Sarah Drew

    Great work on this poem. It has a good rhyme scheme and a nice flow.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lucy Loves Not

    I don't usually like love poems, or rhyming poems, but I loved this poem. Although it was quite simple, you portayed your feelings beautifully. Wonderful write.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow, That is one of the best love poems I've read all day. Very great ryming. The funny thing is im in a relationship and at the beggening it started out the same way... Everyone was always up our a** -lol- Your wife is really lucky!!!! Dont ever let her go!
    ~jessica~
    *aka* Thug Baby

  • 14 years ago

    by Samantha

    Very nice goth... a beautiful poem like this has to come from someone with a beautiful soul... keep it up... your poems are amazing...

    sammie

  • 13 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    I like your poem, keep up the good work!