The end of the world

by NIKKI   Sep 19, 2005


The world may end in fire
The world may end in ice
But for my burning desiree
I rather fire
To end in ice
I beleave is nice
But is much to cold
To be in an internal hold
In my eyes
I rather die
In the fame
Of an internal flame.
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I know its not to good but could you please comment anyway. I appricate it very much. TY.

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  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    Wow you did do alot with this poem i really like the changes you made and the last 4 lines are beautiful. such a touching poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by sarah

    This poem is good although i think you could make a lot of changes to make it better. - first try with the beat and match syllables that will give you a start hope to read this poem again and see how its different.
    much love sarah

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