Dancer of the Clearing

by Drew Gold   Sep 25, 2005

The fire that she danced about
suffused the air
with the thick, enduring scent
of burning wood;
that decadent fragrance.

her hips switched and shifted -
just like an ocean’s tide
waving up and down her figure.
her movements matched perfectly
the deep-toned rhythm
of the bass-drums surrounding.

above her head,
her hands swayed gracefully,
almost as if they commanded
this fire-lit symphony
with their own free will
in a seductively
fluid series of motions.

adorning her neck
was a milky white snake
and its ever-curious tongue;
coiled in perfect contrast
with the deep hues
of golden bronze
that outlined her shining figure.

her heavenly gaze
held just as much energy
and life
as nature aflame -
i never had the pleasure
of meeting those
shimmering blue pearls of her eyes
before thunder struck its own
mighty drum,
shaking the very fabric of nature.

the clouds of jealousy
rained down upon the clearing
and each spiteful drop
stung upon impact.

as a chilling breeze
swept me up and set me on my way,
the last thing i saw
before darkness enveloped
and drums ceased to beat
was the woman of the clearing
dancing steadily to her own heart
while lost in shadows
of the dying embers.


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  • 14 years ago

    by Avrii Monrielle

    Sexily beautiful, wonderful imagery :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Lenny

    Wow that was brilliant as always, i think this new point of view, its simplicity, and the story it tells combines to make it a really fine piece. Geez your getting alot of comments and votes these days aye. I can see why though.

  • 14 years ago

    by christina marie

    This is a really descriptive poem, i loved it! it was really beautiful...

    ~*Lollipop Sweetie*~

  • 14 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    A beautifully described scene though out the poem. The images you conveyed were detailed enough to bring the poem to life. My favourite couple of lines were “her hips switched and shifted -
    just like an ocean’s tide.” Although most of the imagery was truly original, this particular one did it for me.
    I have no real suggestions other than in some places the poem lacked punctuation, then in others it had a sufficient amount. Also capitalising “I” could neaten it up a little.
    Lovely write, with amazing images. Thanks for sharing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Angie

    Very magical and mystical and so unique. I enjoyed reading this one, I was able to visualize it all. You painted quite a picture.....

    Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela